I’m delighted to announce that this story has found a home with the Dark Futures online e-zine. If you’re interested in reading it, you can find it on their site at Dark Futures under March 2014. (Saving Mae)
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5 thoughts on “Saving Mae Part Three”
Call me old-fashioned, but I’d like to object;
With Mae’s prison-mates falling victim to Fall’s neglect.
Her ‘gang’ didn’t seem to be as supportive as portrayed:
Almost getting rent by ‘crawlers’ would leave you feeling betrayed.
The loss of Mae’s individuality, was disappointing to me,
I think the bad-guys should lose; no matter how naive that may be.
Someone could argue that the bad guys lost in the end,
And that the ‘hero’ won, but I disagree, and not to offend;
I like endings of success, though sci-fi seems to be limited in that particular variety.
But I think it needs more of that kind, and I declare it with utmost piety.
What’s wrong with having Fall get helped by her reluctant gang near the finish;
saving the others while also striking a heavy blow to Margini dominance is my wish.
I just thought I’d give you my personal opinions,
while doing a little constructive bashing on the evil minions.
Take what you will, leave what you won’t;
Hope you don’t take it personally, really please don’t.
No worries. I’m not taking it personally=) Honestly, I love happy endings. I guess you, my readers, are the guinea pigs for me lately because I’ve been trying to stretch myself with endings I don’t think of first. And yes, if I weren’t exactly at the max word count for the contest, I’d make this longer with Fall’s gang helping out… Perhaps I’ll do that later if the contest doesn’t go in my favor. Thanks so much, S.J., for the feedback=)
The journey shall continue! Healing takes time and it is suspected the continuing story shall also.
I like it! Good job with the sad-but-hopeful ending 🙂
The last line took me a couple rereads to understand.
I’ll see if I can reword the last line better. Thanks, Leslie=)